Has Smeyer even BEEN to the Pacific northwest? Bella notices the "gray-green" light of a cloudy day in the forest. Now, I don't dispute that the light could look gray-green in the middle of the forest except THEY ARE NOT.
The rain has all frozen and Bella's talking about being all clumsy and shit, and it reminds me of when there was freezing rain a few years ago and everything was uniformly coated with ice. It took like forty minutes to drive to school and as soon as my feet touched the ground I fell down. It was awesome.
Perhaps it was because I was a novelty here, where novelties were few and far between.
FUCK. Duuuuude. I am SO SICK OF THIS. YOU ARE NOT A NOVELTY. NO ONE CARES. The closest Foam Lake got to being as excited as these losers supposedly are was when Sheho school shut down and all those students came to our school. And that was because THERE WERE LIKE TEN NEW STUDENTS IN OUR GRADE. But just one new student? GodDAMMIT. It's not that exciting.
Possibly my crippling clumsiness was seen as endearing rather than pathetic, casting me as a damsel in distress.
Possibly? You know that is EXACTLY what you were going for, Smeyer. You're not fooling anyone.
Whatever the reason, Mike's puppy dog behavior and Eric's apparent rivalry with him were disconcerting. I wasn't sure if I didn't prefer being ignored. My truck seemed to have no problem with the black ice that covered the roads.
Wow, non sequitur, much? These books wouldn't be half as terrible if she actually had an editor.
I wasn't used to being taken care of,
Like fuck you aren't.
Yes, the van part. Okay, I had to use visual aids to figure this out. Here is what I can gather is happening:
So the van is coming at her and then folds itself around her truck (instead of bouncing backwards or coming to a halt, for some weird reason). Edward tackles her so she is now between her truck and another car. It curled AROUND her truck and started coming again? Then Edward grabs the van and moves backwards with Bella and instead of dragging the car as he moves, then the van stops. So yeah, I don't know why the van would wrap itself around the back of the truck instead of bouncing backwards, but whatever.
I don't remember Coach
"How dare everyone care about me?"
And yeah, no one would be in the waiting room. Stacey got a concussion and no one (that I know of) visited her in the hospital. Brittany like almost died and probably only her friends visited her. Janelle got TSS and probably only her friends visited her. NO ONE. CARES. FUCK.
"Take some Tylenol for the pain," he suggested as he steadied me.
That's some crack medical advice there, Doc.
"How dare anyone tell me mother that I almost died?"
Chapter 4- Invitations
Lol, I almost wrote "interventions."
I couldn't allow him to have this level of influence over me. It was pathetic. More than pathetic, it was unhealthy.
This is possibly the only sensible thing she ever says throughout the whole series.
Gym isn't capitalized.
Of course he wasn't interested in me, I thought angrily, my eyes stinging — a delayed reaction to the onions. I wasn't interesting. And he was. Interesting… and brilliant… and mysterious… and perfect… and beautiful…
If the walls in my rez weren't paper thin, I would scream with rage right now.
"Seattle is a big city — you could get lost," he fretted.
I think the emphasis is on the wrong word here. It should be, "you could get lost" or "you could get lost" or even "you could get lost."
"Will you be back in time for the dance?" Grrr.
Lolol. I have never seen anyone write "grr" in a first person story before.
He did understand. "Oh, that's right," he realized.
This is probably the worst couple of sentences I have ever seen in my life, other than "You are the very most different of all." Calling the Department of Redundancy Department.
I'm getting deja vu. There really is only about 2% original writing in Midnight Sun.
He enunciated every syllable, as if he were talking to
someone mentally handicapped.
You're not far off, Edward. Not far off.
Stupid, shiny Volvo owner.
That's the cutting wit we all know and love.
"We shouldn't be friends. Wanna go to Seattle today? But you should stay away."
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